Well, in that case...

For starters, you might want to stop calling it a script. It's not a script. Have you ever seen a script? You have more like a sypnosis here. And you might want to be able to tell apart a movie from a television show.

The plot sounds way to generic. Your language is too straight-forward. This happened and then this happened, and so forth and 'bam' happy ending...hardly captivating. Well, then again, this isn't a script.

I'll say Jessica looks younger than her age but 18-22? I think you're stretching it there.

Have you heard of http://www.winglin.net/fanfic ? That's where all the literary creative fans freely go to express their fiction, where you might not have to scream in a forum to get feedbacks from.

And finally, how old are you, if you don't mind my asking. You don't sound too realistic. This is a fan forum. People will read it for their entertainment but that's about it. It's hard to think anything else will come out of it.

If you're interested in writing scripts, you should look into it because if you actually learn the aspects of it and have the creativity, you might actually score, you never know. Good luck.

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1.compare with the previous person's script,is my script too bad at all in idea or content?i'll accept any good or bad comment?
2.are there any improvements?
3.does anyone really read it?if not,that improves that my creativity isn't appreciated,but i can claim that i'm not copy the animation,just my imagination ^ create the storyline,i'm very upset & unhappy as NO ONE read it,so there aren't any comments!!!

i hope jessica will read it & comment it,so i have at least one comment!!!

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MY SCRIPT FOR JESSICA & LOUIS:THE LEGEND OF FEMALE RACING DRIVER

Jessica & Louis are main casts. Both of them act as racing drivers. Jessica with long hair will be very charming to act as a female racing driver and Louis is very handsome. They've participated car racing competitions for 2 years and Jessica is tired of it. She always argue & compare with Louis(Jessica & Louis come from 2 different teams),then they became lovers.

Jessica is an university student & single daughter in the family,her father is a top 一級方程式 racing driver who achieves many champions in competitions.He dies by an accident in the competition. Her father wishes Jessica to be a racing driver to continue his glorious champion history. Thus after Jessica finished her studies, she doesn't listen to the advice from her tutor & mother, also she give up jobs with high salary & position, she wishes to become a top racing driver. She is a book-worm in the university but she looks ambitious when she sits in her car. She wants to win Louis but she fails.she develops her DRIFTING skills. Louis feels that Jessica is his only real competitor.He compete with Jessica in a downslope road.Finally Louis does his best with his skills fully uterilised but he fails to win Jessica.

Except Jessica,there're a few actresses aged 18-22,acted as racing drivers. They're the main casts too.They have different ambitions & beliefs. They develop different skiils, The 2nd actress learns DRIFTING skill from Jessica and competion among these actresses begins. Louis is only actor in the movie. At the end of the movie is a happy ending, all actresses finish her wishes. Jessica becomes a champion. She goes to Europe to participate competition. Louis goes together & cheer up for her. Finally Jessica becomes famous racing drivers & is known around the world......

I can accept any position & negetive comments,improvement will be made if the script is too bad!!!

no,Jessica will act in her real age but there're other few young actresses aged 18-22,i only think about the idea but my contect has not finished thinking yet.i just ask for opinion from guys.thank you!!!

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Well, in that case...

For starters, you might want to stop calling it a script. It's not a script. Have you ever seen a script? You have more like a sypnosis here. And you might want to be able to tell apart a movie from a television show.

The plot sounds way to generic. Your language is too straight-forward. This happened and then this happened, and so forth and 'bam' happy ending...hardly captivating. Well, then again, this isn't a script.

I'll say Jessica looks younger than her age but 18-22? I think you're stretching it there.

Have you heard of http://www.winglin.net/fanfic ? That's where all the literary creative fans freely go to express their fiction, where you might not have to scream in a forum to get feedbacks from.

And finally, how old are you, if you don't mind my asking. You don't sound too realistic. This is a fan forum. People will read it for their entertainment but that's about it. It's hard to think anything else will come out of it.

If you're interested in writing scripts, you should look into it because if you actually learn the aspects of it and have the creativity, you might actually score, you never know. Good luck.

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1.compare with the previous person's script,is my script too bad at all in idea or content?i'll accept any good or bad comment?
2.are there any improvements?
3.does anyone really read it?if not,that improves that my creativity isn't appreciated,but i can claim that i'm not copy the animation,just my imagination ^ create the storyline,i'm very upset & unhappy as NO ONE read it,so there aren't any comments!!!

i hope jessica will read it & comment it,so i have at least one comment!!!

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MY SCRIPT FOR JESSICA & LOUIS:THE LEGEND OF FEMALE RACING DRIVER

Jessica & Louis are main casts. Both of them act as racing drivers. Jessica with long hair will be very charming to act as a female racing driver and Louis is very handsome. They've participated car racing competitions for 2 years and Jessica is tired of it. She always argue & compare with Louis(Jessica & Louis come from 2 different teams),then they became lovers.

Jessica is an university student & single daughter in the family,her father is a top 一級方程式 racing driver who achieves many champions in competitions.He dies by an accident in the competition. Her father wishes Jessica to be a racing driver to continue his glorious champion history. Thus after Jessica finished her studies, she doesn't listen to the advice from her tutor & mother, also she give up jobs with high salary & position, she wishes to become a top racing driver. She is a book-worm in the university but she looks ambitious when she sits in her car. She wants to win Louis but she fails.she develops her DRIFTING skills. Louis feels that Jessica is his only real competitor.He compete with Jessica in a downslope road.Finally Louis does his best with his skills fully uterilised but he fails to win Jessica.

Except Jessica,there're a few actresses aged 18-22,acted as racing drivers. They're the main casts too.They have different ambitions & beliefs. They develop different skiils, The 2nd actress learns DRIFTING skill from Jessica and competion among these actresses begins. Louis is only actor in the movie. At the end of the movie is a happy ending, all actresses finish her wishes. Jessica becomes a champion. She goes to Europe to participate competition. Louis goes together & cheer up for her. Finally Jessica becomes famous racing drivers & is known around the world......

I can accept any position & negetive comments,improvement will be made if the script is too bad!!!

the script was ok...but..i still cannot imagine Jessica as a race car driver..haha..but it will be another kind of character for her..a new challenge for her:)))how come Louis is the only actor??n does it mean tat among Jessica's team had a competition among themselves??n does the ending mean tat Louis gave up driving??besides these it is ok..good job!!

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MY SCRIPT FOR JESSICA & LOUIS:THE LEGEND OF FEMALE RACING DRIVER

Jessica & Louis are main casts. Both of them act as racing drivers. Jessica with long hair will be very charming to act as a female racing driver and Louis is very handsome. They've participated car racing competitions for 2 years and Jessica is tired of it. She always argue & compare with Louis(Jessica & Louis come from 2 different teams),then they became lovers.

Jessica is an university student & single daughter in the family,her father is a top 一級方程式 racing driver who achieves many champions in competitions.He dies by an accident in the competition. Her father wishes Jessica to be a racing driver to continue his glorious champion history. Thus after Jessica finished her studies, she doesn't listen to the advice from her tutor & mother, also she give up jobs with high salary & position, she wishes to become a top racing driver. She is a book-worm in the university but she looks ambitious when she sits in her car. She wants to win Louis but she fails.she develops her DRIFTING skills. Louis feels that Jessica is his only real competitor.He compete with Jessica in a downslope road.Finally Louis does his best with his skills fully uterilised but he fails to win Jessica.

Except Jessica,there're a few actresses aged 18-22,acted as racing drivers. They're the main casts too.They have different ambitions & beliefs. They develop different skiils, The 2nd actress learns DRIFTING skill from Jessica and competion among these actresses begins. Louis is only actor in the movie. At the end of the movie is a happy ending, all actresses finish her wishes. Jessica becomes a champion. She goes to Europe to participate competition. Louis goes together & cheer up for her. Finally Jessica becomes famous racing drivers & is known around the world......

I can accept any position & negetive comments,improvement will be made if the script is too bad!!!

sorry for late reply..not that no one is reading it..but yr first post was in chinese..n i dun understand so i did not read..n i hav not been coming as offten..so i did not see it until today..dun be upset k??

*smiles*

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MY SCRIPT FOR JESSICA & LOUIS:THE LEGEND OF FEMALE RACING DRIVER

Jessica & Louis are main casts. Both of them act as racing drivers. Jessica with long hair will be very charming to act as a female racing driver and Louis is very handsome. They've participated car racing competitions for 2 years and Jessica is tired of it. She always argue & compare with Louis(Jessica & Louis come from 2 different teams),then they became lovers.

Jessica is an university student & single daughter in the family,her father is a top 一級方程式 racing driver who achieves many champions in competitions.He dies by an accident in the competition. Her father wishes Jessica to be a racing driver to continue his glorious champion history. Thus after Jessica finished her studies, she doesn't listen to the advice from her tutor & mother, also she give up jobs with high salary & position, she wishes to become a top racing driver. She is a book-worm in the university but she looks ambitious when she sits in her car. She wants to win Louis but she fails.she develops her DRIFTING skills. Louis feels that Jessica is his only real competitor.He compete with Jessica in a downslope road.Finally Louis does his best with his skills fully uterilised but he fails to win Jessica.

Except Jessica,there're a few actresses aged 18-22,acted as racing drivers. They're the main casts too.They have different ambitions & beliefs. They develop different skiils, The 2nd actress learns DRIFTING skill from Jessica and competion among these actresses begins. Louis is only actor in the movie. At the end of the movie is a happy ending, all actresses finish her wishes. Jessica becomes a champion. She goes to Europe to participate competition. Louis goes together & cheer up for her. Finally Jessica becomes famous racing drivers & is known around the world......

I can accept any position & negetive comments,improvement will be made if the script is too bad!!!

And why is Louis the only actor? I thought race drives were mostly male.

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MY SCRIPT FOR JESSICA & LOUIS:THE LEGEND OF FEMALE RACING DRIVER

Jessica & Louis are main casts. Both of them act as racing drivers. Jessica with long hair will be very charming to act as a female racing driver and Louis is very handsome. They've participated car racing competitions for 2 years and Jessica is tired of it. She always argue & compare with Louis(Jessica & Louis come from 2 different teams),then they became lovers.

Jessica is an university student & single daughter in the family,her father is a top 一級方程式 racing driver who achieves many champions in competitions.He dies by an accident in the competition. Her father wishes Jessica to be a racing driver to continue his glorious champion history. Thus after Jessica finished her studies, she doesn't listen to the advice from her tutor & mother, also she give up jobs with high salary & position, she wishes to become a top racing driver. She is a book-worm in the university but she looks ambitious when she sits in her car. She wants to win Louis but she fails.she develops her DRIFTING skills. Louis feels that Jessica is his only real competitor.He compete with Jessica in a downslope road.Finally Louis does his best with his skills fully uterilised but he fails to win Jessica.

Except Jessica,there're a few actresses aged 18-22,acted as racing drivers. They're the main casts too.They have different ambitions & beliefs. They develop different skiils, The 2nd actress learns DRIFTING skill from Jessica and competion among these actresses begins. Louis is only actor in the movie. At the end of the movie is a happy ending, all actresses finish her wishes. Jessica becomes a champion. She goes to Europe to participate competition. Louis goes together & cheer up for her. Finally Jessica becomes famous racing drivers & is known around the world......

I can accept any position & negetive comments,improvement will be made if the script is too bad!!!

"the legend of female facing driver" that louis helps her to reach an aspiration..........i think

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And why is Louis the only actor? I thought race drives were mostly male.

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MY SCRIPT FOR JESSICA & LOUIS:THE LEGEND OF FEMALE RACING DRIVER

Jessica & Louis are main casts. Both of them act as racing drivers. Jessica with long hair will be very charming to act as a female racing driver and Louis is very handsome. They've participated car racing competitions for 2 years and Jessica is tired of it. She always argue & compare with Louis(Jessica & Louis come from 2 different teams),then they became lovers.

Jessica is an university student & single daughter in the family,her father is a top 一級方程式 racing driver who achieves many champions in competitions.He dies by an accident in the competition. Her father wishes Jessica to be a racing driver to continue his glorious champion history. Thus after Jessica finished her studies, she doesn't listen to the advice from her tutor & mother, also she give up jobs with high salary & position, she wishes to become a top racing driver. She is a book-worm in the university but she looks ambitious when she sits in her car. She wants to win Louis but she fails.she develops her DRIFTING skills. Louis feels that Jessica is his only real competitor.He compete with Jessica in a downslope road.Finally Louis does his best with his skills fully uterilised but he fails to win Jessica.

Except Jessica,there're a few actresses aged 18-22,acted as racing drivers. They're the main casts too.They have different ambitions & beliefs. They develop different skiils, The 2nd actress learns DRIFTING skill from Jessica and competion among these actresses begins. Louis is only actor in the movie. At the end of the movie is a happy ending, all actresses finish her wishes. Jessica becomes a champion. She goes to Europe to participate competition. Louis goes together & cheer up for her. Finally Jessica becomes famous racing drivers & is known around the world......

I can accept any position & negetive comments,improvement will be made if the script is too bad!!!

Very good racing drivers that you wrote is her another personality.

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MY SCRIPT FOR JESSICA & LOUIS:THE LEGEND OF FEMALE RACING DRIVER

Jessica & Louis are main casts. Both of them act as racing drivers. Jessica with long hair will be very charming to act as a female racing driver and Louis is very handsome. They've participated car racing competitions for 2 years and Jessica is tired of it. She always argue & compare with Louis(Jessica & Louis come from 2 different teams),then they became lovers.

Jessica is an university student & single daughter in the family,her father is a top 一級方程式 racing driver who achieves many champions in competitions.He dies by an accident in the competition. Her father wishes Jessica to be a racing driver to continue his glorious champion history. Thus after Jessica finished her studies, she doesn't listen to the advice from her tutor & mother, also she give up jobs with high salary & position, she wishes to become a top racing driver. She is a book-worm in the university but she looks ambitious when she sits in her car. She wants to win Louis but she fails.she develops her DRIFTING skills. Louis feels that Jessica is his only real competitor.He compete with Jessica in a downslope road.Finally Louis does his best with his skills fully uterilised but he fails to win Jessica.

Except Jessica,there're a few actresses aged 18-22,acted as racing drivers. They're the main casts too.They have different ambitions & beliefs. They develop different skiils, The 2nd actress learns DRIFTING skill from Jessica and competion among these actresses begins. Louis is only actor in the movie. At the end of the movie is a happy ending, all actresses finish her wishes. Jessica becomes a champion. She goes to Europe to participate competition. Louis goes together & cheer up for her. Finally Jessica becomes famous racing drivers & is known around the world......

I can accept any position & negetive comments,improvement will be made if the script is too bad!!!

i don't understand why after the accident of her father she still want to be a racing driver ....she should know that it is dangerous,what if something happens to her,her mother will be alone....

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MY SCRIPT FOR JESSICA & LOUIS:THE LEGEND OF FEMALE RACING DRIVER

Jessica & Louis are main casts. Both of them act as racing drivers. Jessica with long hair will be very charming to act as a female racing driver and Louis is very handsome. They've participated car racing competitions for 2 years and Jessica is tired of it. She always argue & compare with Louis(Jessica & Louis come from 2 different teams),then they became lovers.

Jessica is an university student & single daughter in the family,her father is a top 一級方程式 racing driver who achieves many champions in competitions.He dies by an accident in the competition. Her father wishes Jessica to be a racing driver to continue his glorious champion history. Thus after Jessica finished her studies, she doesn't listen to the advice from her tutor & mother, also she give up jobs with high salary & position, she wishes to become a top racing driver. She is a book-worm in the university but she looks ambitious when she sits in her car. She wants to win Louis but she fails.she develops her DRIFTING skills. Louis feels that Jessica is his only real competitor.He compete with Jessica in a downslope road.Finally Louis does his best with his skills fully uterilised but he fails to win Jessica.

Except Jessica,there're a few actresses aged 18-22,acted as racing drivers. They're the main casts too.They have different ambitions & beliefs. They develop different skiils, The 2nd actress learns DRIFTING skill from Jessica and competion among these actresses begins. Louis is only actor in the movie. At the end of the movie is a happy ending, all actresses finish her wishes. Jessica becomes a champion. She goes to Europe to participate competition. Louis goes together & cheer up for her. Finally Jessica becomes famous racing drivers & is known around the world......

I can accept any position & negetive comments,improvement will be made if the script is too bad!!!